Friday, March 23, 2012

Friday Fictioneers: Agoraphobia



 

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“Vast, horrible emptiness.” She sat on the bench, her eyes glued to the sky beyond the bare branches.

“I had thought if we brought her outside, to get through to her…” the doctor mused.

The taller doctor shook his head, looking up. “We see blue, friendly sky, and beyond that, a busy space. Most people can perceive the vastness, the infinity of a busy universe She sees a frightening void with hidden horrors.”

He glanced down when she sobbed, hiding her face in her shaking hands.

“If only we could show her what’s out there.”

“Only when ordinary humans can make the trips to space will we see success in treatment.”

“She’s terrified.”

The tall doctor turned to him. “Aren’t we all?” he answered.

9 comments:

Janet said...

Oooo. very ominous. Guess she has good reason to be afraid.

Here's mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/03/23/trapped/

Russell said...

Yes, we all see things differently. Some people see the dark side of every silver cloud. Very well written.

thanks for the nice comment on mine.

http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

Palooski65 said...

I'd wonder what traumatic incident would fill her mind with such fear. The ominous tone makes me wonder if the drs. are truly "helping" or are they the source/portion of the problem? I love a good psychological mystery--well done.

Mine: www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

In the eyes of the beholder... Chilling tale. Nicely done.

Here's mine:
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/new-world-100words-well-200-for.html

Siobhan

BlueFury said...

A very ominous piece, making me wonder who this woman is and why she can only see the horrors of the world and beyond.

Mine's here:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/03/23/fridayfictioneers-crimson-sunset/

Douglas MacIlroy said...

Dear S.L.,

Doctors haven't a clue, but you do, and your writing shows it. An interesting take on the prompt.

Aloha,

Doug

http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/23/answers/

Lora said...

Interesting. Wonder if she is autistic. Fearful because she's a prisoner... unable to express herself. Nice job. Here's mine:
www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

Judee said...

Definitely a matter of perspective, but somehow I don't trust those doctors... Well done!

Mine: http://writetuit.wordpress.com/2012/03/24/flash-friday-kill-shot/

Madison Woods said...

Very interesting even though I don't know yet what is going on. I'd keep reading to find out. Good story!